I'm going to write every day this year. I'm going to get out one of my old journals and put a few lines down. If I write a blog or write on a novel, my entry might just be 'see blog' or 'Death Man 300 words' or what not. I need to write. That is my life blood right now. I need focus. And any writing, no matter how serious, how decent, how pathetic, or how bland, is better than no writing.
Amanda LaFantasie © (last day of) 2013
Tuesday, December 31, 2013
Monday, December 30, 2013
Vocab Builder Word
SOLIPSISM
n. Philosophy
1. The theory that the self is the only thing that can be known and verified.
2. The theory or view that the self is the only reality.
[Latin slus, alone; see s(w)e- in Indo-European roots + Latin ipse, self + -ism.]
solip·sist n.
solip·sistic adj.
1. The theory that the self is the only thing that can be known and verified.
2. The theory or view that the self is the only reality.
[Latin slus, alone; see s(w)e- in Indo-European roots + Latin ipse, self + -ism.]
solip·sist n.
solip·sistic adj.
I read this word in a workshop piece and fell in love with it. Essentially it is a spectrum word that indicates a person's inability (in varying degrees) to empathize with others. It's totally a Philip K. Dick wet-dream word.
Weekly vocab word
flor·id [flawr-id, flor-]
adjective
1. reddish; ruddy; rosy: a florid complexion.
2. flowery; excessively ornate; showy: florid writing.
3. Obsolete . abounding in or consisting of flowers.
adjective
1. reddish; ruddy; rosy: a florid complexion.
2. flowery; excessively ornate; showy: florid writing.
3. Obsolete . abounding in or consisting of flowers.
Monday, December 23, 2013
Long awaited and belated weekly vocab word
ca·ve·at [kav-ee-aht, -at, kah-vee-, key-] Show IPA
noun
1. a warning or caution; admonition.
2. Law. a legal notice to a court or public officer to suspend a certain proceeding until the notifier is given a hearing: a caveat filed against the probate of a will.
noun
1. a warning or caution; admonition.
2. Law. a legal notice to a court or public officer to suspend a certain proceeding until the notifier is given a hearing: a caveat filed against the probate of a will.
Do you Mary Sue?
For people who don't know what Mary Sue means it is essentially inserting oneself into a story and creating a character that is impossibly perfect. I think there is a masculine form of this term but just as Brony (a seemingly masculine term applied in general to those who enjoy My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic) covers everyone in the gender spectrum, so too does the term Mary Sue. So take the test and see if your hero/in is too good to be true or too bland to be possible. Post your scores if you like what you see or post them if you don't like then and give a comment on what you want to change for the character or if you feel that the score is unjustified for the specifics of your character. Happy writing everyone and Happy Holidays, too!
This Deviant Artist hit the nail on the head in her depiction of a typical Mary Sue story. |
Amanda LaFantasie © 2013
Tuesday, November 19, 2013
Scripturient
www.gdfalksen.com/post/67540778214
This is now one of my new favorite old words.
scripturient
scripturient adjective & noun. [skrɪp'tʃʊǝrɪǝnt] Now rare. M17.
[Late Latin scripturient- pres. ppl stem of scripturire desire to write, from Latin script-: see SCRIPTURE, -ENT.]
A. adjective. Having a passion for writing or authorship. M17.
B. noun. A person with a passion for writing. Only in M17.
scripturiency noun a passion or mania for writing M17.
[Late Latin scripturient- pres. ppl stem of scripturire desire to write, from Latin script-: see SCRIPTURE, -ENT.]
A. adjective. Having a passion for writing or authorship. M17.
B. noun. A person with a passion for writing. Only in M17.
scripturiency noun a passion or mania for writing M17.
This is now one of my new favorite old words.
Saturday, November 9, 2013
Which time? Writing prompt for all and stress relief for National Novel Writer's Month participants.
So I posed a question to all of my friends on Facebook, mostly because I am curious, but also because as I was writing it, I thought perhaps this would be a good time to convert the question into a writing prompt. I left it open for those who just want to give short answers and for those who want to take a break from Nano and write something short and easy. So here's the question or rather questions:
What time period/place do you wish could visit, if it were possible for you to go?
What would you most like to see and what would you like to do while there?
Who would you like to meet in person if there is or was someone you'd like to meet?
And to add another element to the questions, first write this as if you couldn't do anything to change history, because if you did, it would disrupt everything. Then, write it as if it wouldn't matter if you changed history, if you could change history, but remember there are consequences to every action. How do you think your changing things will shape the future?
Thursday, October 31, 2013
NaNoWriMo Time!
It's that time again! National Novel's Writer Month, or NaNoWriMo, is here. It starts midnight tonight. I know that several members of this blog are going to be taking part this year and I thought we could do a mid month check up to see how everyone is doing and how far along they are to their 50 thousand word goals. To kick it off, I'm going to stay up and start writing in the wee first hours of November and see if I can get a good five hundred in before I crash for the night. My goal is to work on new material for my Death Man novel as well as get a start on a new novel that can work as my workshop pieces for the upcoming winter residency where I will be starting my third semester with Pine Manor College's Solstice MFA in Creative Writing.
A word of advise from me for all those out there attempting this wonderful and exciting task: make time. Steal minutes wherever you can. Even if you just have fifteen minutes between things and you think you have enough quiet or concentration to pump out a few paragraphs, then do it. Every little word counts. A book is nothing but chapters and chapters are made of pages and pages are made of paragraphs and those paragraphs are made of sentences and that's where words come in. They are the foundation of everything in literature. Keep the words coming and don't stop to edit (or at least don't stop for too long). Best of luck to my fellow NaNoWriMo participants. Ready, set, write!
A word of advise from me for all those out there attempting this wonderful and exciting task: make time. Steal minutes wherever you can. Even if you just have fifteen minutes between things and you think you have enough quiet or concentration to pump out a few paragraphs, then do it. Every little word counts. A book is nothing but chapters and chapters are made of pages and pages are made of paragraphs and those paragraphs are made of sentences and that's where words come in. They are the foundation of everything in literature. Keep the words coming and don't stop to edit (or at least don't stop for too long). Best of luck to my fellow NaNoWriMo participants. Ready, set, write!
Wednesday, October 30, 2013
The Importance of Imagery
This is my craft analysis for my MFA on imagery using Deliverance by James Dickey as the main source. You do not need to have read the book to read this essay and I do not believe there are any real spoilers contained within. Enjoy!
Gardner introduces the
concept of the originality of the writer’s eye in On Becoming a Novelist. Essentially, “Getting down what the writer
really cares about – setting down what the writer himself notices, as opposed
to what any fool might notice – is all that is meant by the originality of the writer’s eye”
(Gardner 71). The above passage is a
great example of that originality. This
isn’t just a river anymore; it’s Dickey’s river. It’s Ed’s river. Through his narrator, Dickey captures things
about this river that are different from ‘what any fool might notice’ and uses
these things to develop his survival theme.
Ed’s life before the river begins to merge with his life now: “outlining
a face, a kind of god, a layout for an ad, a sketch...” He sees the face of a god in recognition of
the divine power of nature and he relates it to things he knows from his job,
from his life before the canoe trip.
Only this character, presented
by this author, could view things
this way. That is the power of imagery
and the originality of the writer’s eye.
Burroway, Janet, and Susan Weinberg. Writing Fiction: A Guide to Narrative Craft. New York: Longman, 2003. Print.
Dickey, James. Deliverance. Boston: Houghton Mifflin, 1970. Print.
Gardner, John. On Becoming a Novelist. New York: W.W. Norton, 1999. Print.
Scofield, Sandra Jean. The Scene Book: A Primer for the Fiction Writer. New York: Penguin, 2007. Print.
Imagery in the
Georgia Wilderness
Some say
the devil is in the details, but when it comes to imagery, I say the
‘difference’ is in the details. Imagine
a picnic scene. Vivid, sensory
descriptions are all that stand between a Monet-esque
afternoon, and the third circle of Dante’s hell. On one hand we have gently swaying ash trees,
rolling grasses, polished silver with scalloped edges, and starched, white
doilies; on the other we have a threadbare blanket, an overcast sky, enormous
deep-fried turkey legs, an ant army descending upon a glob of jelly, and greasy
fingers digging into the basket for more.
Could very well be the same picnic, but the images give us vastly
different impressions. These
descriptions not only color our perceptions of scenes, they give us a deeper
understanding of the novel as a whole, particularly its theme.
In the
novel, Deliverance, James Dickey reinforces the Darwinian theme –
survival of the fittest, or, you have to adapt or you die – through his use of
sensory and emotional imagery. Janet
Burroway tells us in her book, Writing Fiction: A Guide to Narrative Craft, “... if you are to
realize your characters through detail, then you must be careful to select the
details that convey the characteristics essential to our understanding. You can’t convey a whole person, or a whole
action, or everything there is to be conveyed about a single moment of a single
day. You must select the significant”
(Burroway 78). This goes back to the imaginary
picnic. If the theme is ‘rich people are
slobs and pigs on the inside’ wouldn’t it be better to use the latter
description over the former? Of course
that depends on the context of the rest of the novel. Looking at Deliverance, which is a
story about survival at great physical and emotional costs, it would be strange
if the narrator, Ed, who happens to be a novice hunter, only noticed fluffy
tails, wiggling noses, and cute features when encountering animals. Those details have a time and place, but not
in this novel. The imagery in the
following passage is what separates Dickey from Disney.
“In the middle of this sound the
tent shook; the owl had hold of it in the same place. I knew this before I but the light on – it
was still in my hand, exactly as warm as I was – and saw the feet with the heel
talons now also coming in. I pulled one
hand out of the sleeping bag and saw it wander frailly up through the thin
light until a finger touched the cold reptilian nail of one talon below the
leg-scales. I had no idea of whether the
owl felt me; I thought perhaps it would fly, but it didn’t. Instead, it shifted its weight again, and the
claws on the foot I was touching loosened for a second. I slipped my forefinger between the claw and
the tent, and half around the stony toe.
The claw tightened; the strength had something nervous and tentative
about it. It tightened more, very
strongly but not painfully. I pulled
back until the hand came away, and this time the owl took off.
All night the owl kept coming back
to hunt from the top of the tent. I not
only saw his feet when he came to us; I imagined what he was doing while he was
gone, floating through the trees, seeing everything. I hunted with him as well as I could, there
in my weightlessness. The woods burned
in my head. Toward morning I could reach
up and touch the claw without turning on the light” (Dickey 89).
Nothing is
fluffy or friendly about this owl.
Dickey uses words like ‘reptilian,’ ‘stony,’ ‘claw,’ and ‘scales’ to
describe an animal that, in a different setting, might be considered cute. The image Dickey creates is that of a fit and
efficient hunter, everything that Ed wants to be, and, in the end, is forced to
become. In On Becoming a Novelist
by John Gardner, the author says that “... the writer who works closely with
detail – studying his characters’ most trivial gestures in the imagined scene
to discover exactly where the scene must go next – is the writer most likely to
persuade and awe us” (Gardner 37). So
much happens in this small scene where Ed touches the owl. Through his “most trivial gestures” we
understand, or have an idea, of what has to happen next. Already we see Ed adapting himself for
survival: “I hunted with him as well as I could,” and, “I could reach up and
touch the claw without turning on the light.”
Sandra
Scofield reminds us in her book, The Scene Book; A Primer for the Fiction
Writer, to, “... keep in mind that you want details to be part of action,
not tacked on for effect. And do
remember to engage all of the reader’s senses, not just sight” (Scofield
112). The owl passage focuses more on
touch than it does sight, but an even better example of “... integrat(ing)
description – mak(ing) it a part of the flow of the action of the scene ...”
(Scofield 111) occurs during a confrontation between the protagonists and two
men who, “... stepped out of the woods, one of them trailing a shotgun by the
barrel” (Dickey 107). The climax moment
of this confrontation occurs in sounds:
“I knelt down. As my knees hit, I heard a sound, a snap-slap
off in the woods, a sound like a rubber band popping or a sickle-blade cutting
quick. The older man was standing with
the gun barrel in his hand and no change in the stupid, advantage-taking
expression of his face, and a foot and a half of bright red arrow was shoved
forward from the middle of his chest. It
was there so suddenly it seemed to have some from within him” (Dickey 116).
While
Burroway tells us, “A detail is ‘definite’ and ‘concrete’ when it appeals to the
senses. It should be seen, heard,
smelled, tasted, or touched” (Burroway 75), Dickey often creates images using a
combination of abstract and sensual details. In the following passage there are a number of
details that help us see the river on its surface level, “... as if [we] were a
movie camera” (Gardner 71), but we also see it as Ed sees it, as something
mindless, indifferent, and uncomprehending.
“What a view, I said again. The river was blank and mindless with
beauty. It was the most glorious thing I
have ever seen. But it was not seeing,
really. For one it was not just seeing.
It was beholding. I beheld the river in its icy pit of
brightness, in its far-below sound and indifference, in it large coil and tiny
points and flashes of the moon, in its long sinuous form, in its
uncomprehending consequence. What was
there?
Only that terrific brightness. Only a couple of rocks as big as islands,
around one of which a thread of scarlet seemed to go, as though outlining a
face, a kind of god, a layout for an ad, a sketch, an element of design” (Dickey 171).
One of the
lengthier scenes in Deliverance depicts Ed climbing a mountain cliff. It is a simple enough action: man climbs
mountain. But the massive amounts of sensory detail that go into the scene’s
composition turn it into an intense conflict of man versus nature.
“I got on one knee and went cautiously
outward, rising slowly with both hands palm-up on the underside of the fissure
top. I was up, slanting backward, and I
felt along and around the bulge over my head.
To the right there was nothing I could do, but I was glad to be
back. To the left the crevice went on
beyond where I could reach, and the only thing to do was to edge along it, sidestepping
inch by inch until only my toes, very tired again, were in the crack” (Dickey
175).
“Time after time I
lay there sweating, having no handhold or foothold, the rubber of my toes
bending back against the soft rock, my hands open. Then I would begin to try and inch upward
again, moving with the most intimate motions of my body, motions I had never
dared use with Martha, or with any other human woman. Fear and a kind of enormous moon-blazing
sexuality lifted me, millimeter by millimeter” (Dickey 176).
What starts
out as ‘man climbs mountain’ turns into ‘man f***s mountain.’ It makes sense in a way. There is an enormous amount of risk and
physical exertion involved in climbing and in love making and Dickey uses this
relationship between activities to not only create a visceral image for the
reader but to also how Ed’s development in becoming a survivor. Scofield says, “... ‘description’ isn’t a
discreet element in narrative” (Scofield 111), and there is certainly nothing
discreet in Ed’s triumph over the mountain:
“It was painful, but I was going.
I was crawling, but it was no longer necessary to make love to the
cliff, to f*** it for an extra inch or two in the moonlight, for I had some
space between me and it” (Dickey 177).
The
example of the picnic from the beginning gives us a taste of the spectrum of
choices an author has to make when writing imagery into a scene, but Dickey’s
text shows without a doubt the importance of making the right choices. In The Scene Book, Scofield says, “Forget
those high school classes where you talked plot, setting, character,
theme. Those things aren’t
separate! You want your descriptions to
exist as part of action and emotion, part of the meaning of your scenes”
(Scofield 111). Imagery is just one
piece of the puzzle. It’s a piece, if
done well, that is entirely unique to each author,
and even each character, and it’s the one that makes all the
difference.
Works Cited:
Burroway, Janet, and Susan Weinberg. Writing Fiction: A Guide to Narrative Craft. New York: Longman, 2003. Print.
Dickey, James. Deliverance. Boston: Houghton Mifflin, 1970. Print.
Gardner, John. On Becoming a Novelist. New York: W.W. Norton, 1999. Print.
Scofield, Sandra Jean. The Scene Book: A Primer for the Fiction Writer. New York: Penguin, 2007. Print.
Amanda LaFantasie © October 2013
Thursday, October 10, 2013
Vocab Builder
Stentorian!
adj. Extremely loud: a stentorian voice.
Example: His stentorian cries of terror echoed throughout the apartment building until the tentacles won, and then there was silence.
Thursday, September 5, 2013
Book List!
This semester at Pine Manor I have a fantastic line-up of books to read. I have already tackled seven - almost eight! - and felt like it might be interesting to show our readers and contributors the annotated bibliography that I have to keep for my readings. What you see below has been copied and pasted from my personal account at EasyBib.com, which has been a godsend for this project. Please note that my annotations are meant as a personal guide for myself to see what I learned or liked about a book and perhaps even why. They contain spoilers and also some of my immediate reaction.
Abbott, G. The Executioner Always Chops Twice: Ghastly Blunders on the Scaffold. New York: St. Martin's, 2004. Print.
Dickey, James. Deliverance. Boston: Houghton Mifflin, 1970. Print.
Gaiman, Neil. The Ocean at the End of the Lane. New York: HarperCollins, 2013. Print.
Gardner, John. Grendel. New York: Vintage, 1989. Print.
Memmer, Philip. Lucifer, a Hagiography: Poems. Sandpoint, ID: Lost Horse, 2009. Print.
Myers, Walter Dean, and Christopher Myers. Monster. New York, NY: HarperCollins, 1999. Print.
Vonnegut, Kurt. Slaughterhouse-five: Or, The Children's Crusade, a Duty-dance with Death. New York: Dell Pub., 1999. Print.
Abbott, G. The Executioner Always Chops Twice: Ghastly Blunders on the Scaffold. New York: St. Martin's, 2004. Print.
- It is interesting reading how someone methodically describes the actual mechanics of bringing people to pain and to death and giving an objective bird's eye view of the process. Helpful to me in my own detailing of execution in writing. This book is a fast and interesting read - the best part of it is the accidental intimacy we begin to feel for certain hangmen by the end and for the Sanson family in particular. It gives a bit of humanity to the ones carrying out the sentences as well as a bit of justice (or scrutiny) to the one's being killed. Also has great insight to the mental rationale of the executioner (one says he executes while his predecessor hung them - another says that he doesn't kill them, he let's them kill themselves at the end of his rope).
Dickey, James. Deliverance. Boston: Houghton Mifflin, 1970. Print.
- Favorite parts were the owl on the tent, the making love to the rock wall, and the part when he cut out the arrow. I had visceral reactions to much of the 'gore' or 'pain' descriptions and oddly enough, not as much of a reaction to the rape. It reinforces some of the rape culture beliefs of the time and makes the victim feel tainted through Ed's POV. Overall, this is a fantastic example of effect and poetic prose. The ending was subtle and I wouldn't have minded just a bit more of something - it sort of just stopped after a wonderful cool down period. I loved all the non-sentimental and yet extremely sad mentions of Drew and his death. Excellently haunting. This is the 1970's version of Lord of the Flies for me: Drew = Simon, Lewis = Jack (in his savageness), Bobby = Piggy, and Ed = Ralph. Very archetypal in that way. Highly enjoyable read.
Gaiman, Neil. The Ocean at the End of the Lane. New York: HarperCollins, 2013. Print.
- He wrote the first part intending to make it 'boring' so that it might dissuade young, young readers from continuing on - so that only kids mature enough to get through the boring part would persist. I love the dip back into memory and the part when he feels it's a 'ghost memory' that it didn't happen when he gets his heart ripped out by the varmints. I love the end so much that he is still recovering even at forty-seven and that he's suffered as a human and is growing a new heart. This is a fantastic and quick read with so much imagery and such a raw-innocence in it that it just had to be told through a child's eyes. There's something beautiful about this story that makes me feel like Gaiman is a web weaver - like he wrote the epilogue long before he wrote the first chapter (probably not) but he had such precision in getting from the start to the end. Such tight story telling and no wasted words. It was wonderful and the repetition of water and fabric were just gorgeous.
Gardner, John. Grendel. New York: Vintage, 1989. Print.
- An interesting look at POV - I really fell in love with this poor monster. I melted every time he screamed, "Wah! Mama!" It was fun and full of anachronistic moments, phrases, 'knowings', that made it highly humorous yet no less serious. Gardner's use of dialogue mixed with action is fantastic and reinforces the aesthetic of the novel. Fun stuff in the book: moments when the structure takes a movie type turn as well as moments when the first line of the paragraph is flush with the margin and the rest of the paragraph is indented. This inversion really caught my eye. Fantastic resource for structure. Something else that I loved and found to be very effective was that it went 'oh so smoothly and sneakily' from first person past tense to first person present tense. That was brilliant especially since the ending of the novel portrays Grendel on a fall to his death and it ends with this suspended moment of knowing what's going to happen but having to use your own imagination for it.
Memmer, Philip. Lucifer, a Hagiography: Poems. Sandpoint, ID: Lost Horse, 2009. Print.
- Interesting take on the Lucifer myth - putting him neck and neck with Christ as a caring and sympathetic brother rather than an antagonist. I like the brother-ness. The story telling in the poetry is fantastic. Favorites include the dance and when Lucifer watches his daughter be born. I like the reaffirmation that Satan and Lucifer are different angels. It's a real twist that God wanted Lucifer to perform the Christ role initially and that this 'plan' was what made Lucifer drop out of heaven saying 'that's the stupidest thing he'd ever heard.'
Myers, Walter Dean, and Christopher Myers. Monster. New York, NY: HarperCollins, 1999. Print.
- Super quick read - nice handling of some very adult matter (prison rape and violence) without making it too graphic or turning off a younger audience. My only complaint with the book is that the main character is sixteen and much of his diary entry narrative feels younger than that. It could just be the fear making him feel that way, or maybe he's not that intelligent but the rest of the story leads us to believe that he is quite smart. The end is haunting and unsettling and leaves such a chillingly ambiguous taste in my mouth that it redeems any 'immaturity' in the text prior. Also I love the gradual and effective way Myers pulls us into the screenplay format.
Vonnegut, Kurt. Slaughterhouse-five: Or, The Children's Crusade, a Duty-dance with Death. New York: Dell Pub., 1999. Print.
- It's like a dream within a dream within a dream within a dream. Craft-wise, I enjoyed the various POV narrators and the broad spectrum third person (with occasional author asides) that delved into omniscience. For satire and comedy this broad stroke style is highly effective it seems. This book also makes me proud of my affection for ugly, mutilated, awkward, and otherwise non-traditional appearance characters. No one in the book is attractive accept maybe Derby and he's doomed from the get go. Structure wise I adore the long chapters with continuous breaks (lots and lots of white space) and not just between Billy's 'time travel jumps' but also in the middle of a conversation. It gives the reader a breath and for me it makes it easier to come back and read again and pick up with a sense of knowing exactly what's going on. There's so many lovely gems in here - all of Kilgore Trout's novels and the recurring imagery of silver and blue defining the skin of the dead. Not to mention the picture of the pony and the woman. I liked the non-linear approach and it worked to make Billy even more interesting.
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Wednesday, August 21, 2013
Language Creation
Language. What is it? A grouping of words, symbols, signs, gestures, and sounds used to communicate. Language is used everyday, from speaking to people, texting, computer programming, the posting of pictures, and so on. Suffice to say, language is important to know and understand the world around us.
But what about created worlds? What about the races and places that writers create? How do these people communicate? It is easy for an author to use their native tongue when their characters speak and think. I don't find anything wrong with that. It is easy - for some - to translate a few sentences into a different language. I do that constantly, changing English to Latin, French, Italian, and Russian. But I am a language nerd. I love various languages.
However, in my creation of worlds and races, I have backed myself into a wall of sorts. I have elves, vampires, sorcerers, witches, and so on. Each of these races have their own histories, and therefore, they need their own languages. But, how do I go about creating various languages for my races, without it sounding alien?
Tolkien is a great inspiration for language creation. Using the Elder Futhark Runes, he fashioned the Uruk Runes spoken by the Uruk-hai. The Cirth Runes - language of the Dwarves - is based upon the Anglo Saxon runic alphabet.
By following Tolkien's example, I am in the midst of creating a few languages for my various races. I am in the middle of creating a history for my vampire race. Finally figuring out where my vampires originated from, I can now use the languages from that area to create my own. For my vampires, I am mixing Elder Futhark Runes, the Lepontic (Lugano) language, and Ogham. I think that what I come up with will be fantastic, but it will take a lot of hard work.
http://www.omniglot.com/index.htm This is fantastic website all about languages. Omniglot is the online encyclopedia of writing systems and languages. It has sections on phonetics, different writing systems, and sections about conlangs - constructed languages.
Here is to making the created world a little more complete, with a language of their own.
But what about created worlds? What about the races and places that writers create? How do these people communicate? It is easy for an author to use their native tongue when their characters speak and think. I don't find anything wrong with that. It is easy - for some - to translate a few sentences into a different language. I do that constantly, changing English to Latin, French, Italian, and Russian. But I am a language nerd. I love various languages.
However, in my creation of worlds and races, I have backed myself into a wall of sorts. I have elves, vampires, sorcerers, witches, and so on. Each of these races have their own histories, and therefore, they need their own languages. But, how do I go about creating various languages for my races, without it sounding alien?
Tolkien is a great inspiration for language creation. Using the Elder Futhark Runes, he fashioned the Uruk Runes spoken by the Uruk-hai. The Cirth Runes - language of the Dwarves - is based upon the Anglo Saxon runic alphabet.
By following Tolkien's example, I am in the midst of creating a few languages for my various races. I am in the middle of creating a history for my vampire race. Finally figuring out where my vampires originated from, I can now use the languages from that area to create my own. For my vampires, I am mixing Elder Futhark Runes, the Lepontic (Lugano) language, and Ogham. I think that what I come up with will be fantastic, but it will take a lot of hard work.
http://www.omniglot.com/index.htm This is fantastic website all about languages. Omniglot is the online encyclopedia of writing systems and languages. It has sections on phonetics, different writing systems, and sections about conlangs - constructed languages.
Here is to making the created world a little more complete, with a language of their own.
Tuesday, August 20, 2013
Fighting with writer's block and killing it dead.
Writer's block is that nasty, greasy bitch who likes to come visit at the most inconvenient time and cause all sorts of drama and emotional upheaval. It likes to leave us unsettled and wanting a gods damned break, just a little bit of one, just for a few hours, so we can get our train back on track and chugging along. Sometimes we can back hand the bitch and shove it out the door but sometimes, even if we've slapped it and ourselves, we just can't seem to recover.
It was easier when we were younger. We didn't have as many hang ups. We didn't have as many worries or things that invaded our writing time or space. There weren't roommates, in-laws, and health problems, work, homework of the assumed 'higher education' levels and a social life. We weren't too worried about grammar and spelling, speaker tags, whether or not to use this word rather than that word. If we decided to share it with someone they would tell you how awesome it was because they wanted to encourage you and would forgive all the little mistakes and focus more on content. If we didn't share it, then it was our own little treasure. We only had to really focus on our story, play time, and the simpler things in life.
I have to say finding time to write hasn't really been an issue in some respects, it's getting things around me to settle enough so I CAN write. I have come across a problem where I live that makes it very difficult for me to write and trying to come up with compromises simply aren't working. Goting other places doesn't seem to help much either. Thus a lot of my writing drive has been squish-squashed. Health complications have also made it difficult to really focus on much of anything. Which is very sad because writing used to be my coping mechanism for just about everything. Writing used to keep me sane, well saner.
So what does a person do when that's taken away and hindered? Fight for it! It's hard, so very very hard, but you have to fight for it, even if it's scratching at the surface and you just write blogs or letters to trusted friends bitching about someone or something. You have to write short stories and it doesn't matter if it is crap. Sometimes you need crap. Sometimes you have to get the steaming pile of shit out of your system so the good stuff that has been trapped can surface. If you're angry, write something angry. Take what ever you are angry about and turn it into a character and then torture it, make that character suffer. I know that sounds twisted but at least you will have written something.
I've read some opinions from published authors who say writer's block doesn't exist, that it's a writer being this or that, that they just don't want to sit down and write. That we basically just need to suck it up and just sit down and do it if we want to be successful. Whether it's all in our heads or there are some other problems going on, they all seem to agree that you have to write through it. If this is the job you want, then you have to treat it like a job.
Here is the blog from Larry Correia (he wrote Monster Hunter International) that has be of some help and inspiration to me. He doesn't hand hold. He gives it to you straight, which I think is what most people want and need. It's not a five minute read so read it when you have a few minutes. The second link is his post about time management.
Ask Correia: How to be a professional author.
Ask Correia: Time management for writers
I don't know if this is going to help anyone and this isn't some magical cure-all. These are just some ideas and harsh realities meant to help knock us all back into gear. We're probably always going to battle with this problem from time to time. I mean I've spent months dealing with and fighting against things out of my control. There were, still are, and will always be days where I'm far too panicky and emotionally raw (that happens when you live with chronic pain but that's for a personal blog) to set foot outside my room much less deal with all the noise and commotion in my house. I swear there have been days where I've actually wanted to break every TV in my house and wished everyone had a bad case of laryngitis. There were, still are, and probably will always be days where my back pain makes it hell to sit in a chair for short periods of time much less long ones. Sometimes I can make sitting on the sofa work if only because I can change my potion more frequently. Sometimes I just can't and have to squeeze in as much as I can for as long as I can stand it. But it has only been recently that I have actually really worked on my works-in-progress- novels. Before that, I was still writing, just blog posts, e-mails, and letters. But I was writing something.
The point is simple, you can't stop. You have keep writing something, anything. I'm not going to say 'if I can do it then you can do it too'. No, that's one of those cheap cop-outs self help and diet plan sales people try to get you to buy into their crap, good advice or not. This is entirely on you just as much as it's entirely on me. A story isn't going to write itself. So look that writer's block bitch in the face and have a fight it with, blow it up, torture it as much as it tortures you, but kill it dead and when it comes back to life, kill it again.
It was easier when we were younger. We didn't have as many hang ups. We didn't have as many worries or things that invaded our writing time or space. There weren't roommates, in-laws, and health problems, work, homework of the assumed 'higher education' levels and a social life. We weren't too worried about grammar and spelling, speaker tags, whether or not to use this word rather than that word. If we decided to share it with someone they would tell you how awesome it was because they wanted to encourage you and would forgive all the little mistakes and focus more on content. If we didn't share it, then it was our own little treasure. We only had to really focus on our story, play time, and the simpler things in life.
I have to say finding time to write hasn't really been an issue in some respects, it's getting things around me to settle enough so I CAN write. I have come across a problem where I live that makes it very difficult for me to write and trying to come up with compromises simply aren't working. Goting other places doesn't seem to help much either. Thus a lot of my writing drive has been squish-squashed. Health complications have also made it difficult to really focus on much of anything. Which is very sad because writing used to be my coping mechanism for just about everything. Writing used to keep me sane, well saner.
So what does a person do when that's taken away and hindered? Fight for it! It's hard, so very very hard, but you have to fight for it, even if it's scratching at the surface and you just write blogs or letters to trusted friends bitching about someone or something. You have to write short stories and it doesn't matter if it is crap. Sometimes you need crap. Sometimes you have to get the steaming pile of shit out of your system so the good stuff that has been trapped can surface. If you're angry, write something angry. Take what ever you are angry about and turn it into a character and then torture it, make that character suffer. I know that sounds twisted but at least you will have written something.
I've read some opinions from published authors who say writer's block doesn't exist, that it's a writer being this or that, that they just don't want to sit down and write. That we basically just need to suck it up and just sit down and do it if we want to be successful. Whether it's all in our heads or there are some other problems going on, they all seem to agree that you have to write through it. If this is the job you want, then you have to treat it like a job.
Here is the blog from Larry Correia (he wrote Monster Hunter International) that has be of some help and inspiration to me. He doesn't hand hold. He gives it to you straight, which I think is what most people want and need. It's not a five minute read so read it when you have a few minutes. The second link is his post about time management.
Ask Correia: How to be a professional author.
Ask Correia: Time management for writers
I don't know if this is going to help anyone and this isn't some magical cure-all. These are just some ideas and harsh realities meant to help knock us all back into gear. We're probably always going to battle with this problem from time to time. I mean I've spent months dealing with and fighting against things out of my control. There were, still are, and will always be days where I'm far too panicky and emotionally raw (that happens when you live with chronic pain but that's for a personal blog) to set foot outside my room much less deal with all the noise and commotion in my house. I swear there have been days where I've actually wanted to break every TV in my house and wished everyone had a bad case of laryngitis. There were, still are, and probably will always be days where my back pain makes it hell to sit in a chair for short periods of time much less long ones. Sometimes I can make sitting on the sofa work if only because I can change my potion more frequently. Sometimes I just can't and have to squeeze in as much as I can for as long as I can stand it. But it has only been recently that I have actually really worked on my works-in-progress- novels. Before that, I was still writing, just blog posts, e-mails, and letters. But I was writing something.
The point is simple, you can't stop. You have keep writing something, anything. I'm not going to say 'if I can do it then you can do it too'. No, that's one of those cheap cop-outs self help and diet plan sales people try to get you to buy into their crap, good advice or not. This is entirely on you just as much as it's entirely on me. A story isn't going to write itself. So look that writer's block bitch in the face and have a fight it with, blow it up, torture it as much as it tortures you, but kill it dead and when it comes back to life, kill it again.
Saturday, August 17, 2013
Hannah's (Crimson Lantern's) new goal list.
The lovely Amanda LaFantasie last posted this blog's anniversary (which is amazing! Great job everyone!) and also about old goals and new. So here I am, reviewing my old list and compiling a new list.
Old list:
1. Finish a book
2. Improve spelling and grammar
3. Be more descriptive
4. Write more elegantly and eloquently
5. Get something published.
6. Improve writing habits/ setting word goals
New List:
1. Finish a book! I get so fixated if something doesn't feel right that I end up derailing myself.
2. Work on letting go of the small stuff and moving forward in a story.
3. Be more descriptive but don't bash it in. Sometimes less is more and learning the balance is key.
4. Writing more elegantly, sure, but writing gritty as well
5. Improve writing habits. This is the hardest of all but I will explain that later in another blog. Setting word goals aren't really a concern of mine at the moment. I am happy to write a paragraph at this point. Again, I will explain later.
6. Balance out my reading list. I need to read more fiction and less non-fiction.
7. Getting feedback. Again this is another blog post entirely, but it is just as important as anything else. 8. Make it worse, make it hot! Something Amanda's current mentor from Pine Manor College, Sterling Watson, said. Some of the best advice I have ever heard.
Friday, August 16, 2013
Happy Anniversary: Looking Back and Looking Forward
As I was perusing the blog today, I noticed that it's been a year since we got this craziness going! Our official anniversary was the 13th of this month, but we'll celebrate it a few days later because I definitely feel it's worth celebrating. Firstly I want to congratulate everyone who has been a part of this blog, the admin, the writers, the editor, and the readers. I know that for me, Detangled Writers has been a source of pride, enjoyment, and education. Taking a look at our contributor profiles, I see a group of people who I hold in high esteem. These women have taken time out of their lives to share their thoughts and knowledge with the writing community. Some of the goals we wrote in our profiles might be a bit outdated by now - some things might be all done and checked off, some things may have been set aside, while others may be in progress. I invite the contributors to create fresh goals lists and provide an update. Tell us about your writing; what projects do you have going on, is writer's block bugging you, are you having trouble finding time for your craft? Also, let's talk about what goals we have for the blog in general and how we can become an even better support network for each other.
Old Goals for Amanda LaFantasie (Skoora)!
- Time Management
- Keeping the Creative Juices Flowing
- Finishing what I start...
- Grad School and everything to do with it!
- Characters - working on characterizations
I accomplished part of number four by applying to and being accepted to an MFA program. I am currently working toward completing my masters in creative writing at Pine Manor College. Number five can be removed because, for me, the writing itself is what generates character and plot and trying to work on those independently is possible but not really a goal. As far as the first three goals, I would keep one and three on my list! Number two is less of a goal for me and more a goal for the blog. My new list, a much more specific list, would look like this:
New Goals!
- Time Management
- Finish Death Man (my current novel in progress)
- Work on short stories for Workshops
- Read craft books and fiction novels
- Attend an AWP conference (Seattle 2014)
Some goals for the blog would be to see some more blogs on hot topics such as fanfiction writing, romance versus erotica, elements of craft, literary definitions and analyses, and even book reviews and discussions. I would love to see more vocab words! Everyone is encouraged to post vocab builders and word exercises. If people have personal blogs where they share writing pieces, I would like to see entries detailing the process, successes, and failures they had with the project and then a link so we can read your work.
I hope that everyone who is part of this blog is as proud of it as I am. This post brings our total to 148 published blogs for Detangled Writers. Here's hoping that by this time next year we have upwards of 300! Thank you to our contributors and readers.
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Wednesday, August 14, 2013
Grammar Corner: Further versus Farther
I was advised recently by my MFA mentor to look into the difference between these terms. While I'm not sure if my misuse stems from misinformation or from a repetitious typo (I somehow always type breath when I mean to type breathe), I followed my mentor's advice and here is what I've found.
It's confusing to say the least as one appears to speak of actual physical distance while the other does not. But if we look at the further, freedictionary.com tells us this:
fur·ther (fûrr)
adj. A comparative of far.
1. More distant in degree, time, or space: a result that was further from our expectations than last time; the further lamppost.
2. Additional: a further example; a further delay.
1. To a greater extent; more: considered further the consequences of her actions.
2. In addition; furthermore: He stated further that he would not cooperate with the committee.
3. At or to a more distant or advanced point: went only three miles further; reading five pages further tonight.
far·ther (färr)
adv. A comparative of far.
1. To or at a more distant or remote point: ran farther than the others.
2. To or at a more advanced point or stage: I went no farther that day.
3. Usage Problem To a greater extent or degree: carried the idea farther.
adj. A comparative of far.
More distant; remoter: the farther shore.
It's confusing to say the least as one appears to speak of actual physical distance while the other does not. But if we look at the further, freedictionary.com tells us this:
fur·ther (fûrr)
adj. A comparative of far.
1. More distant in degree, time, or space: a result that was further from our expectations than last time; the further lamppost.
2. Additional: a further example; a further delay.
1. To a greater extent; more: considered further the consequences of her actions.
2. In addition; furthermore: He stated further that he would not cooperate with the committee.
3. At or to a more distant or advanced point: went only three miles further; reading five pages further tonight.
So when it comes to further we might say: Jimmy has come a great deal further with his studies than little Janie. We might also say: I want to take my game further than it's ever been before. In the previous sentence, 'further' indicates an intangible destination. But what about concepts that two possible interpretations such as heaven/nirvana/the ether? "I wanted to go to heaven but knew I would have to go much further to get there," versus, "I wanted to go to heaven but knew I would have to go much farther to get there." Does one mean spiritual distance and the other mean down the road? That's where it gets confusing for me.
adv. A comparative of far.
1. To or at a more distant or remote point: ran farther than the others.
2. To or at a more advanced point or stage: I went no farther that day.
3. Usage Problem To a greater extent or degree: carried the idea farther.
adj. A comparative of far.
More distant; remoter: the farther shore.
Methinks that the free dictionary might not be enough to answer this grammar question. I've called in some experts, namely Grammar Girl.
In this article, she breaks it down simply into:
Farther = Far(ness) as in the physical distance ('far' being a pnuemonic device)
Further = Figurative distance, which can include abstracts like degrees
This is satisfactory for me, but now that I've focused on these words, I feel like the simple breakdown might be too simple. English has a knack for breaking all of it's own rules, after all. But for now, I'll try to keep farther down the road and further up the scale. And when it comes to 'death' or 'heaven' or 'hell,' I suppose it depends on the meaning the author is going for. "I wanted to go to Heaven, Mississippi but it was farther than I realized," or, "I wanted to be a good girl and go to heaven but preacher said I was further into sinning than a Saint into praying."
Thursday, August 8, 2013
The Curious Case of the First Person Omniscient Narrator
Craft Analysis, Packet 1
Author(s): Kurt Vonnegut, John Gardner, Walter Dean Myers
Novel Title(s): Slaughterhouse-Five, Grendel, Monster
Student: Amanda LaFantasie
Semester 2, August 2013
The Curious Case of the
First Person Omniscient Narrator
What are
rules for if not for breaking, or at least bending? The Elementary school version of first person
point of view might go something like this: the main character uses the pronoun
‘I’ and the story is told completely from his or her perspective limiting us to
only what that character knows. But it
isn’t as clear as all that. The phrase,
‘I learned later,’ is just one way that authors are able to provide greater
scope to a scene where the first person narrator might fall short of giving a
solid account of the action. There are
other ways to stretch the limits of what first person narration is capable
of.
Kurt
Vonnegut, for instance, enables the narrator of Slaughterhouse-Five – a
veteran of WWII who survived the Dresden firebombing – to relay his story with a
degree of omniscience that is rare even in third person point of view. He uses a particular method to accomplish
this: a story within a story. Others
have also found ways to free themselves from the strict parameters of first
person. In Grendel, John Gardner
invokes the omniscience that one would commonly find on the stage in moments
when the first person narrator, the famous monster from the Old English poem
“Beowulf,” views the world as if it were a play. Similar to this, Walter Dean Myers broadens
the first person narrative by alternating between journal and screenplay format
in the novel Monster, wherein a sixteen-year-old boy faces the
possibility of jail time after a neighborhood robbery goes wrong.
Each of these novels warp the typical portrayal of the
first person narrative until the warping itself becomes part of the
characterization, creating a sense of detachment and revealing the mental strain
and sometimes dubious sanity of the narrator.
For any
of this to really work, the author must first establish a strong first person
voice. Chapter one of Slaughterhouse-Five
is 22 pages of ‘I’ and ‘we’ and all the traditional elements associated with a
first person POV, thus introducing the reader to the god-author who will make
himself known in further chapters. The
narrator begins with stating, “All this happened, more or less. […] I’ve
changed all the names,” and so simply sets us up for the third person story
that he wrote (a story within a story), which takes place primarily between
chapters 2 and 9 (Vonnegut 1). In
chapter 10, the first person narrative voice returns and wraps up the
experiences not only himself but of the main character from his story.
At the end of the first chapter,
the narrator prepares the audience for a leap away from the first person point
of view that they’ve just gotten used to and bring us into a story he calls The
Children’s Crusade (Vonnegut 15).
“I’ve finished my war book now.
The next one I write is going to be fun. This one is a failure, and had
to be, since it’s written by a pillar of salt.
It begins like this:
Listen:
Billy Pilgrim has come unstuck
in time.
It ends like this:
Poo-tee-weet?” (Vonnegut
22). And just as promised, the story
does begin with “Listen” and end with “Poo-tee-weet,” but what he fails to
mention is that he is not going away just because it’s Billy Pilgrim’s
story. Despite the appearance of third
person omniscience in The Children’s Crusade, the narrator continually
makes himself present through first person annotations as well as bold
assertions of authorial omniscience. During
a scene where Billy and a fellow soldier are captured by German forces, the
author mentions the sound of a dog barking.
He goes on to relay information that only a god-narrator could know saying,
“The dog, who had sounded so ferocious in the winter distances was a female
German shepherd. […] She had never been to war before. She had no idea what game was being played. Her name was Princess (Vonnegut 52). This sort of excessive trivia appears again
and again ranging from the way a stranger perceives Billy to be “in abominable
taste” to the fact that Billy and a young German guard are actually distant
cousins but that neither of them ever found that out (Vonnegut 151, 158). It is almost as if the narrator cannot
possibly keep from interfering in his own novel. When Billy is set up at the first POW camp,
he receives stamped dog tags and the narrative author, not Billy, makes this
observation: “A slave laborer from Poland had done the stamping. He was dead now. So it goes” (Vonnegut 91).
The narrator makes himself
unavoidably present throughout his ‘novel’ when he states boldly, things such
as: “It would make a good epitaph for Billy Pilgrim – and for me, too,” and,
“Now Billy and the rest were being marched into the ruins by their guards. I was there.
O’Hare was there. We had spent
the past two nights in the blind inn-keeper’s stable” (Vonnegut 121, 212). This insistence to remind the reader of his
presence is not limited only to scenes which show him in a favorable
light. The first time Vonnegut’s
narrator inserts himself into The Children’s Crusade is after Billy
Pilgrim follows the sounds of grief coming to him from the latrine where he
finds an American soldier wallowing in intestinal discomfort upon the
toilet. “That was I. That was me.
That was the author of this book,” says the narrator, in full admission
(Vonnegut 125).
Another
technique that Vonnegut employs to create an omniscient flavor to his story is
the addition of an all knowing character or characters. In Slaughterhouse-Five, this role
belongs to the Tralfamadorians, a race of aliens who see past, present, and
future simultaneously and who may or may not have kidnapped Billy Pilgrim and
kept him a zoo (Vonnegut 30). During his
time with these creatures, Billy makes an assertion that Earth’s violence will
play a part in the destruction of the universe and, to his shock, the creatures
assure him, “’We know how the universe ends –‘ said the guide, ‘and Earth has
nothing to do with it, except that it gets
wiped out, too.’ […] ‘We blow it up, experimenting with new fuels for our
flying saucers. A Tralfamadorian test
pilot presses a starter button, and the whole Universe disappears.’ So it goes”
(Vonnegut 117).
The moments of Vonnegut’s book
that tend toward a third person omniscience are the moments that solidify the first
person authorship off the war vet narrator who knows everything about every
character and about every object in his
book. While Vonnegut is responsible
for Slaughterhouse-Five, the
first person narrator is very much the author of The Children’s Crusade
and can and does get away with saying impossible to know things about side
characters and how they feel toward Billy Pilgrim. The layering of authorship – even Billy
Pilgrim becomes an author and public speaker in the story (Vonnegut 142) –
creates a certain tug on the reins, strains the reliability of the narrator and
reveals a bit of the fragmented psyche of an old man desperate to chronicle his
time as a prisoner of war.
Some of
the omniscience in Gardner’s Grendel comes from the bird’s eye view that
the title character often assumes. In
this way the world comes to him via the Shaper’s (Bard’s) songs and the
extrapolations Grendel is able to make based on what he sees and hears from the
near and far. Grendel would, “… be
watching a meadhall from high in a tree, night birds singing in the limbs below
me […]. Inside the hall I would hear the
Shaper telling of the glorious deeds of dead kings – how they’d split certain
heads, snuck away with certain precious swords and necklaces – his harp
mimicking the rush of swords, the heroes’ dying words” and through his
observations the narration becomes more and more omniscient (Gardner 34). He learns of the surrounding peoples and the
shifts in alliances and even knows somehow from his perch that “…two groups
would fight as allies […], except that now and then they betrayed each other,
one shooting the other from behind for some reason, or stealing the other
group’s gold, some midnight, or sneaking into bed with the other group’s wives
and daughters” (Gardner 37).
Just as
in Slaughterhouse-Five, Grendel’s omniscience relies heavily on
the establishment of a strong first person narration. This book, for the most part keeps true to
this form, even stating quite obviously who the narrator is such as in the
passage: “The harp turned solemn. He
[the Shaper] told of an ancient feud between two brothers which split all the
world between darkness and light. And I,
Grendel, was the dark side, he said in effect.
The terrible race God cursed” (Gardner 51). There are other places where Grendel
proclaims his own name in relation to the ‘I’ of the story it is when he begins
to say Grendel as a separate entity that things really take on an omniscient
point of view. Here is the first time
the narrator breaks from first person:
What will we call the Hrothgar-Wrecker when Hrothgar has
been wrecked?
(Do a little dance, beast. Shrug it off.
This looks like a nice place – oooh, my! – flat rock, moonlight, views
of distances! Sing!)
Pity poor Hrothgar,
Grendel’s foe!
Pity poor Grendel,
O, O, O!
Winter soon.
(whispering, whispering.
Grendel, has it occurred to you my dear that you are crazy?)
(He clasps hands delicately over his head, points the
toes of one foot – aaie! Horrible nails!! – takes a step, does a turn:
[…]
It will be winter soon.
Midway through the twelfth year of my idiotic war.
Twelve is, I hope, a holy number. Number of escapes from traps. (Gardner 91-92)
It takes
all the way until the end of the section before Grendel reclaims himself as
‘I.’ Through this technique the reader
has a clear idea of the loss of control Grendel feels and the effect it has on
his mental stability, which is, obviously, debilitating. Toward the end of the novel, Gardner
demonstrates Grendel’s emotional destruction further by ambiguously presenting
dialogue in italics, therefore making it seem either imagined or telepathic:
His syllables lick at me, chilly fire. His syllables lick… A meaningless swirl in
the stream of time, a temporary gathering of bits, a few random specks, a
cloud…Complexities: green dust, purple dust, gold. Additional refinements: sensitive dust,
copulating dust… The world is my bone-cave, I shall not want… (He laughs as he
whispers. I roll my eyes back. Flames slip out at the corners of his mouth.)
(Gardner 170)
Preceding this italicized
conversation are a myriad of places within the text where the first person
narrator moves further and further into objectivity and omniscience,
consequently moving detaching himself further and further from himself. At one point he seems to have an out of body
experience which is presented parenthetically in italics. (He
lies on the cliff-edge, scratching his belly, and thoughtfully watches his
thoughtfully watching the queen.) (Gardner 93). Gardner takes it a step further in this
strange mixture of first person commentary and third person stage play:
Theorum: Any
action (A) of the human heart must trigger an equal and opposite reaction (A1).
Such is the golden opinion of the Shaper.
And so – I watch in glee – they take in Hrothulf;
quiet as the moon, sweet scorpion,
he sits between their two and cleans his knife.
SCENE: Hrothulf in the Yard.
Hrothfulf speaks:
In ratty furs the peasants hoe their fields,
fat with stupidity, if not with flesh. (Gardner 113)
The
semi-mathematical word choice also lends itself to the omniscience of the piece
as it comes across as grossly anachronistic.
In Slaughterhouse-Five the all-knowing characters are the Tralfamadorians;
in Grendel that role belongs to the Dragon. With the inclusion of such
characters/elements into their first person narratives, both Vonnegut and
Gardner are able to make the overall concept of omniscience much more
palatable. The Dragon tells Grendel, “’Things
come and go […] That’s the gist of it.
In a billion billion billion years, everything will have come and gone
several times, in various forms. Even I
will be gone. A certain man will
absurdly kill me. A terrible pity – loss
of a remarkable form of life.
Conservationists will howl’” (Gardner 70).
There is
no alien race or dragon to unveil the past, present, and future in Walter Dean
Myer’s novel, Monster, rather this time it is through a camera lens and
a journal that the audience comes to understand what happened and what could happen to the first person
narrator, Steve Harmon. He establishes
a first person base line with a journal entry indicating, “Sometimes I feel
like I have walked into the middle of a movie.
It is a strange movie with no plot and no beginning. The movie is in black and white, and
grainy. Sometimes the camera moves in so
close that you can’t tell what is going on and you just listen to the sounds
and guess” (Myers 3).
This novel teeter-totters
between this journal format and that of a screenplay. Unlike Vonnegut’s novel, Monster does
not spend a great deal of time in the first person to start out, instead, Myers
inserts journal entries throughout, frequently and powerfully enough to keep
the audience from forgetting the narrative voice. There is another key difference between
Monster and the other two, Slaughterhouse-Five and Grendel, this
being that the first person and third person omniscient do not bleed into each
other. There are some sudden shifts
between the two forms, but Myers keeps screenplay
and journal separate. The following is an example of the omniscient
portions which are structured to resemble a screenplay:
FADE IN: INTERIOR:
Early morning in CELL BLOCK D, MANHATTAN DETENTION CENTER. Camera goes slowly down grim, gray
corridor. There are sounds of inmates
yelling from cell to cell; much of it is obscene. (Myers 7)
While
the traditional first person point of view does not make an appearance in these
segments, the narrator does find a way to insert himself without saying ‘I’ or
‘me’ but with just as much potency. The
rolling credits appear on the page in this fashion:
Starring
Steve Harmon
Produced by
Steve Harmon
Directed by
Steve Harmon
(Credits continue
to roll.)
(Myers 9)
The direction in the action line
indicates that the credits are to roll like the opening of Star Wars and while
this isn’t as direct as plastering his name all over the place, it keeps
Steve’s voice present for the audience. Something
even as simple as a line of direction can create a duality within a story. On one hand, the audience reads the bare
bones of a screenplay and on the other hand, when it comes to action lines,
they are reading only the things that Steve feels are most important concerning
his trial and that makes it almost more intimate than his journal entries. We learn of his past through scenes of the
movie:
CUT TO: FILM WORKSHOP at Stuyvesant High School. A film on a small screen is just ending. It is a class project.
[…]
We see STEVE raising his hand, looking much the same as
he does in court.
STEVE
I liked the
editing. (Myers 18-19)
Whereas we learn of his now through the journal: “Notes: I
can hardly think about the movie, I hate this place so much. But if I didn’t think of the movie I would go
crazy. All they talk about in here is
hurting people” (Myers 45). As mentioned
before, there are some quick shifts between journal and movie, and it is when
these two styles meet, but do not mix, that the audience gets an idea of the
narrator’s emotional duress as he immediately chooses to switch over to a
detached persona rather than put this court appearance into a real time journal
entry.
When we got in the court, there was a delay because the
stenographer had brought the wrong power cord.
The court officer was talking about termites.
[…]
OFFICER 1
So this guy
comes to the house and tells Vivian we got
termites. I get home and she’s all upset. I said no way
we got
termites. No way.
JUDGE
You ever see
any termites? (Myers 65)
It
becomes clear that Steve is using the movie as a way to forget that this
horrible thing is happening to him. At
one point, Steve has a death fantasy involving lethal injection and eve this
appears as part of the movie, the camera focusing on his face as imaginary
executioners put in a plug to keep him from messing his pants as he dies (Myers
73). The final movie moment of the novel
captures the fragmentation left by this false sense of security – that the
objective world (third person omniscient) doesn’t hurt as much as the
subjective one (first person limited).
CUT TO: CU of O’BRIEN.
Her lips tense; she is pensive.
She gathers her papers and moves away as STEVE, arms still outstretched,
turns toward the camera. His image is in
black and white, and the grain is nearly broken. It looks like one of the pictures they use
for psychological testing, or some strange beast, a monster.
The image freezes as last words roll and stop mid screen.
A Steve Harmon
Film (Myers 276-277)
So it goes, that breaking the
rules of first person and expanding a fairly limited point of view to the point
of omniscience has many effects on the story.
For these three novels, the most compelling effect is that of
escape. These narrators – the veteran,
Grendel, and Steve – are all prisoners in some way or other. The first one was a POW and spends much of
his life trapped in the memories of that time.
The second narrator tries and fails to understand and walk among the
humans. He becomes a prisoner of his
condition, trapped in his cave with only his mother for constant companionship. Lastly, Steve is, quite literally, a
prisoner. When he is not in court, he is
in a prison cell – guilty until proven otherwise so it seems. For each one of these characters, it is the
idea of escape that propels them toward omniscience. The drive to know and be done with it. To finally be free of their prison.
At the end of Myer’s novel,
there is an Extra’s section where the author answers various questions. When asked why he chose to use the screenplay
format, he explained, “In interviewing inmates I noticed a tendency for the
inmates to attempt to separate their self-portrayals from their crimes. In Monster I have Steve speak of himself in
the first person in his diary, but when he gets to the trial and the crime he
distances himself through the use of the screenplay” (Myers, Extras 7). What Walter Dean Myers sums up in this
response is more than just the reason why Steve hides behind the camera lens,
it is the reason for the war veteran’s story within a story and the logic of Grendel’s
stage play projections. It is why the
disintegration of first person into third is a fascinating ride for the
audience; it exemplifies humanities ever present need to cope.
Gardner, John. Grendel. New York: Vintage, 1989. Print.
Myers, Walter Dean, and Christopher Myers. Monster. New York, NY: HarperCollins, 1999. Print.
Vonnegut, Kurt. Slaughterhouse-five: Or, The Children's Crusade, a Duty-dance with Death. New York: Dell Pub., 1999. Print.
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Friday, August 2, 2013
Vocab Word
Recalcitrant
re·cal·ci·trant (r-kls-trnt)
adj.
Marked by stubborn resistance to and defiance of authority or guidance.
adj.
1. resisting authority or control; not obedient or compliant: a recalcitrant prisoner.
2. hard to deal with, manage, or operate.n.
3. a recalcitrant person.
re·cal·ci·trant (r-kls-trnt)
adj.
Marked by stubborn resistance to and defiance of authority or guidance.
adj.
1. resisting authority or control; not obedient or compliant: a recalcitrant prisoner.
2. hard to deal with, manage, or operate.n.
3. a recalcitrant person.
Wednesday, July 24, 2013
Reading is the Thing
I have read three books this month and will read one or two more before the calendar ticks over into August. Reading is part of my homework for the MFA program and as a result it has helped me build up my repertoire of devoured fiction. Each and every day I am reminded via absolutely priceless lines of verse and tear-jerking emotional dialogue and action that reading truly is the most essential building block of a writer and also the most useful tool in a writer's work box.
What are some books that you (contributors and readers alike) have read recently? Take some time to think about what parts of the book inspire, appall, upset, or confuse you. Think about why and also think about how the author has accomplished these this - or not accomplished it as well as you would like. Reading and thinking about what you've read are the two cornerstones in writing.
Here are some books I recommend if you are in need of good reading material. Please, please, please feel free to add to this list. I would like to make a large posting with a composite 'must read' list as recommended by the contributor's of Detangled Writers!
- Grendel by John Gardner
- Battle Royale by Koushun Takami
- Drowned Cities by Paolo Bacigalupi
- The Road by Cormac McCarthy
- Ender's Game by Orson Scott Card
Monday, July 22, 2013
A Word is Only the Beginning of the End
This is a topic I might have already touched upon, however I wanted to revisit it. If I have not mentioned it on Detangled Writers, or if I have and you just don't want to scroll a dozen pages back, I will start by asking you all a question: What does it take to make a story? Not a good story, not an amazing story, or even a bad story. Just a story, the rest can come after; and why am I asking you this? Because this is a topic that is both intriguing to me, while being irksome at once.
We have many expectations for a story, some of them very shallow. I'll name a few, a story must have plot, and it must be reasonable, that's one expectation - or often considered requirement. A story must have characters, and those characters need to serve a purpose. A story must have meaning, not necessarily a lesson, but meaning that relays to the reader. And that leads to the most shallow of expectations (in my opinion), a story must be written - or oral, but it must be made of words.
This expectation has often baffled me, as a person who can sit and stare at a piece of artwork, or listen to a classical work of art, and wonder and imagine and build from them. Yet many people are very adamant that such things as music or artwork are not stories. Do you believe this is true? In one of my writing courses we had a very heated debate on what a story was, and most people attested that no, a story had to be a full manuscript, but it could not be a picture or any form of artwork.
I believe this to be a very narrow view, and as a writer, as an artist, as someone who loves listening to music, I wanted to share this idea with you all. I was one of three people that contested this view of storytelling, and here is why. All of my stories, start with pictures, start with a feeling that I'm having inside, because that's my outlet, and so when I was told that art was not a form of storytelling I was quite offended, because this is what I believe a story is.
Anything that can get your imagination invested. As simple as that. I believe that if you look at a picture, and you ask 'why?' there is a story there, because as soon as you ask why, your mind starts building that story for itself. The artist who painted the picture, there was an investment in the presentation, there was a thought, and as an artist myself, there is a story, at least for me, even if it's missed by everyone else.
Now I know that's a very broad view, and can be equally as dangerous as the narrow view of story, so I'll condense it into a smaller frame of idea. Native Americans and Ancient Egyptians often used pictures to depict their legends where words and language were not enough. Would we deny that these are stories?
Finally the definition of story that really bothered me was that a story must have length:
"For sale, baby shoes. Never worn."
- Ernest Hemingway
This is the story that Hemingway considered his very finest in it's power to invoke a reaction. He believed this to be his greatest work of all time, and many people say that this is not a story at all. They say it's a piece of prose, but that it lacks the length and meaning of a story. It lacks the meaning? Do you believe this is true? "For sale, baby shoes. Never worn." This lacks meaning? ...Never worn; why? Why were these shoes never worn. Considering Hemingway's time, it leads to the assumption that the child died, if the child didn't die, there was something amiss with the shoes, but either way, there is a distinct feeling of loss - at least to me.
Because of the contention against this piece, a form of writing known as flash-fiction was created, and in fact my limited research on the topic genuinely suggests that this is the very reason flash-fiction was created at all. However flash-fiction doesn't necessarily make it a story. I admit I don't believe this is probably Hemingway's best work, but the fact that it resounded so strongly with him, and that he believed it to be his best, doesn't that investment in and of itself make it a story? Of course Hemingway knows much more than any of us behind the true meaning of the story, because perhaps the shoes were just too small for the baby, we don't know, it leaves us to wonder though.
So I want to ask all of you, what do you think qualifies as a story? Do you think it's an underlying meaning, or does it have to have words and length? Do pictures and songs count? Or is it what comes after that counts?
We have many expectations for a story, some of them very shallow. I'll name a few, a story must have plot, and it must be reasonable, that's one expectation - or often considered requirement. A story must have characters, and those characters need to serve a purpose. A story must have meaning, not necessarily a lesson, but meaning that relays to the reader. And that leads to the most shallow of expectations (in my opinion), a story must be written - or oral, but it must be made of words.
This expectation has often baffled me, as a person who can sit and stare at a piece of artwork, or listen to a classical work of art, and wonder and imagine and build from them. Yet many people are very adamant that such things as music or artwork are not stories. Do you believe this is true? In one of my writing courses we had a very heated debate on what a story was, and most people attested that no, a story had to be a full manuscript, but it could not be a picture or any form of artwork.
I believe this to be a very narrow view, and as a writer, as an artist, as someone who loves listening to music, I wanted to share this idea with you all. I was one of three people that contested this view of storytelling, and here is why. All of my stories, start with pictures, start with a feeling that I'm having inside, because that's my outlet, and so when I was told that art was not a form of storytelling I was quite offended, because this is what I believe a story is.
Anything that can get your imagination invested. As simple as that. I believe that if you look at a picture, and you ask 'why?' there is a story there, because as soon as you ask why, your mind starts building that story for itself. The artist who painted the picture, there was an investment in the presentation, there was a thought, and as an artist myself, there is a story, at least for me, even if it's missed by everyone else.
Now I know that's a very broad view, and can be equally as dangerous as the narrow view of story, so I'll condense it into a smaller frame of idea. Native Americans and Ancient Egyptians often used pictures to depict their legends where words and language were not enough. Would we deny that these are stories?
Finally the definition of story that really bothered me was that a story must have length:
"For sale, baby shoes. Never worn."
- Ernest Hemingway
This is the story that Hemingway considered his very finest in it's power to invoke a reaction. He believed this to be his greatest work of all time, and many people say that this is not a story at all. They say it's a piece of prose, but that it lacks the length and meaning of a story. It lacks the meaning? Do you believe this is true? "For sale, baby shoes. Never worn." This lacks meaning? ...Never worn; why? Why were these shoes never worn. Considering Hemingway's time, it leads to the assumption that the child died, if the child didn't die, there was something amiss with the shoes, but either way, there is a distinct feeling of loss - at least to me.
Because of the contention against this piece, a form of writing known as flash-fiction was created, and in fact my limited research on the topic genuinely suggests that this is the very reason flash-fiction was created at all. However flash-fiction doesn't necessarily make it a story. I admit I don't believe this is probably Hemingway's best work, but the fact that it resounded so strongly with him, and that he believed it to be his best, doesn't that investment in and of itself make it a story? Of course Hemingway knows much more than any of us behind the true meaning of the story, because perhaps the shoes were just too small for the baby, we don't know, it leaves us to wonder though.
So I want to ask all of you, what do you think qualifies as a story? Do you think it's an underlying meaning, or does it have to have words and length? Do pictures and songs count? Or is it what comes after that counts?
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Sunday, July 14, 2013
It feels like my brain is corroding slowly but surely, especially in the areas where I'm artistically inclined. It's kind of devastating, and so I've been really struggling to figure out what to write, both personally, but also for this blog. I've started so many blog posts and then just had to walk away because I've been so overwhelmed. I'm trying to remedy that now, by discussing some of the hardships that comes with being a writer, and how sometimes 'writer's block' is very real, and to people who depend on artistic expression, very devastating.
I've had a few classmates and associates in the past claim that 'writer's block' is a fallacy, and that there is no such thing as not being able to write anything. Perhaps in that regard they are correct, you can always write something, but what happens when you don't feel what you write, or when you reread it, it is a horror to behold? I've started to read again, slowly but surely, and tried drawing as well to counteract my inability to write, with little success. I've found that my artwork is suffering as well.
So I am at the end of my rope and would like to know how all of you deal with writer's block. How do you combat it, are there any techniques, philosophies, lessons you can share with me? I'd really appreciate it, and as this is a community for writing I thought I'd present this, because certainly I am not the only one who suffers from this. So this can be used as a source to help encourage other writers on how to combat a full imagination shut down.
I've had a few classmates and associates in the past claim that 'writer's block' is a fallacy, and that there is no such thing as not being able to write anything. Perhaps in that regard they are correct, you can always write something, but what happens when you don't feel what you write, or when you reread it, it is a horror to behold? I've started to read again, slowly but surely, and tried drawing as well to counteract my inability to write, with little success. I've found that my artwork is suffering as well.
So I am at the end of my rope and would like to know how all of you deal with writer's block. How do you combat it, are there any techniques, philosophies, lessons you can share with me? I'd really appreciate it, and as this is a community for writing I thought I'd present this, because certainly I am not the only one who suffers from this. So this can be used as a source to help encourage other writers on how to combat a full imagination shut down.
Tuesday, June 25, 2013
Camp National Novel Writer's Month.
It's that time again! Nanowrimo is doing another Camp Nanowrimo for the month of July. I have already signed up and am excited to get started. It's strange, I kind of want to start ahead of time but that wouldn't really count toward the word count for the month of July. Besides, I still have to get all my notes in order so I can attack July with a fury! Rawr!
So, who is going to join me?
So, who is going to join me?
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